Here's one I will probably send out, what would you change?

Is the bass taking up too much room? Drop 1 a bit lack lustre?

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Originally posted by TranceElevation It has potential, but there are some objective errors which could massively improve it. As a start I'd lower that sort of a bass an octave down. And remove that low layer you got going on.

I should probably have lowered that bass in a earlier stage. It sounded better in a way, but it would be a lot of work to make it fit now. Thanks for your suggestion though, will take that with me. If you have anything more on your mind, objective or not, I would appreciate to hear about it.

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Originally posted by Richard Butler I'd say call it a day, you've given your best shot, spent a lot of time on it, time to move on. I like the way you use only a few elements at once but I would just suggest you make them more interesting - listen to some up to date trap for ideas of leads etc.

Thanks, you are right. I will leave it as it is. Some of the sounds are pretty bad, cant argue with that. Hopefully I can present something better in the future.

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Originally posted by Richard Butler Here's one I will probably send out, what would you change? Is the bass taking up too much room? Drop 1 a bit lack lustre?

For starter, the glitching seems off, sounds too mechanical. I would look at that.

And at the start, you have som nasty click going on at the off beat percussion. Other then that the beat is nice.

Im not sure about the sound coming in at 1:23, it doesnt really fit in my opinion. For me, something else would take it's place, maybe a dark vocal sample? I like the drop however.

The second break is good, but again, the same sound as in the first break annoys me. Right at the transition into the break it sounds cool though.

And again, at the end of the track, the glitching, not very tight.

I like the bass, but I think that there are others here that can give you a more reliable opinion about wether it's too big or not.


It got potential if you get it right.

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Originally posted by evo8 i changed the kick - perhaps the last one was a bit on the heavy side

Sounds good too me.

i always like my kicks to have a certain dominance, nothing i hate more than a weak kick - i hear what your saying about fitting in with the track tho

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Originally posted by Richard Butler Here's one I will probably send out, what would you change? Is the bass taking up too much room? Drop 1 a bit lack lustre?

this is really good i have to say. i was listening to a Tale Of Us set and switched to this, it would fit in very well with that style

drop at 2:03 is very good, driving. 2nd breakdown comes in a bit abruptly, some sort of fx there might help to blend it in

im not totally sure about after the 2nd breakdown and i dont think that snare fits, kinda spoils the groove
also id lay off the stutter fx a bit as it sounds a bit too obvious, use sparingly

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Originally posted by SystematicX1 This sounds fucking dope Evo!

thanking you!

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Excellent and most helpful feedback, I think I've taken on board all suggestions including adding a spookey vocal I made before and Evo I quietened that snare in drop 2

Changed some leed melodies etc
Thanks so much

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Thats better! I like what you did with the melody. Maybe some of the closed hats are a little too loud though? Maybe thats just me.

Pretty cool track, dark as hell.

Is this ok without vocals?

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It's ok w/o vocal, buuuuuuut a lill' vocal fx, sth like a female choir "aaah" with a little bit of stutter on the tail could add to the dreamy feeling of the track ^^.

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Originally posted by Richard Butler Is this ok without vocals?

Just my opinion. Honestly Richard, I don't think it needs vox at all

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Originally posted by Richard Butler Is this ok without vocals?

just a quick listen on my laptop here, like the melodies they stand out nicely, its kinda like that Anjunadeep stuff, definitely not deep house

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