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Originally posted by SystematicX1 I have to start taking criticism better as I was about to just say fuck it and ditch this track due to the fact it has been a 5 month project and VERY frustrating. Seeing your guys replies and me "thinking" it was ok,when it's not. So, yea...I guess you could say I do know what you are referencing. So ::deep breath:: here is my reasoning (which is obviously wrong) I was having SC issues where my kick would completely dissolve under the bass. At certain times,on certain notes the bass would swell so much it distorted. I was and am having issues being in the red already and since I am mixing on cans I felt that I may have had to much bass. So, I cut out some of the sub and the kick. Now then...in my car I have an extremely good audio set up which is also treated. I use them for checking my mix (which I try to do on as many devices as possible anyway,this just being the pinnacle). IMHO, I felt it was pretty decent and still better than any of my other mixes. Guess, I am wrong. Now then...the comment from TranceElevation about presence. I am unsure if we are referring to the same thing or not however, I did mention that I felt this track lacks conviction..I still feel that way. Please if you could explain your reasoning.

Listen, the track is really decent. Don't bin it at all. If you're unsure or tired of some projects is better to save them somewhere and forget about them for some time, then get back at it with fresh ears, perspective and more knowledge.
Mystery also hint it needs just some little corrections.

By presence I mean it lacks presence...
From what I can hear there isn't any compression or very subtle...
If you reduced slightly the dynamic range of your bass it'b be easier for you to mix it with the kick. (then if that doesn't solve it you could try with dynamic eq). Only your low end actually needs more presence, the rest is very pleasant. Is always good to hear dynamic tracks like yours.

Then I hear some single element errors (just from my personal perspective) but overall the track is good.

Keep on, you're on the right path.

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Originally posted by Mr.Mystery So I did this... thing. I'm not even sure what genre this is. Tech house? Techno?

I personally would definite it as tech house.

The mixing is really appropriate for the kind. Anyway, the structure leaves much to be desired. Till 1:05 is great, it hooks you...but then you have just build-ups of elements that don't really seem connected between each other.

Interesting background nuances.

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Originally posted by Mr.Mystery So I did this... thing. I'm not even sure what genre this is. Tech house? Techno?

tech house maybe? who knows
thought it gets a bit cluttered in the middle third, few too many elements maybe

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Soundi biggg Darek, good work.

Remove that 'jib jibber' it sounds naff.

At about 3 mins it gets a bit clashing.

Rea; good club track tho, nice vibe and pro soundz

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Originally posted by evo8 tech house maybe? who knows thought it gets a bit cluttered in the middle third, few too many elements maybe

It only gets the manipulated drum loop and that 8-bit synth hit there, but maybe the introduction is a bit too sudden.

I'm not really sure what to do with it. It started out as a knob twiddling experiment out of boredom, but I've grown attached to it now.

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Originally posted by Mr.Mystery So I did this... thing. I'm not even sure what genre this is. Tech house? Techno?

Its got a nice groove and I like the choice of sounds and percussion.

I know you may not want to hear this but I would add some cliche white noise transitions at certain intervals to kinda "guide" the track along a bit more. It doesn't have to be anything too big, just some transition white noise sounds. It would provide some tension and relief. Just my 2 cents.

Nice track!

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Originally posted by Mr.Mystery It only gets the manipulated drum loop and that 8-bit synth hit there, but maybe the introduction is a bit too sudden. I'm not really sure what to do with it. It started out as a knob twiddling experiment out of boredom, but I've grown attached to it now.

on repeat its not so bad, maybe try mono-ing some of the extra elements, should appear to free up space

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Here is a track I have been working on some this weekend... Does it work from a conceptual level? I realize the percussion and mixing need work. I havn't gone into mixing deep yet and am just getting close to finishing the arrangement:



EDIT:

I think I am going to redo the synth progression in the first half after listening to it again.

Last edited by djnitride on May-04-2015 at 17:21

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Originally posted by Mr.Mystery So I did this... thing. I'm not even sure what genre this is. Tech house? Techno?

Real nice groove, love the kik/bass, made me move.

You just need to now give the track a bi more defined personality - there's always a danger with a sorta live tweaked drone in the beckground that it can come across as a bit of a random noodle. So maybe after a minute make the drone into a sorta 8 bar rhythmic drone with a definite personality and role.

The odd stab and / or vocal stab would also give it a proper personality.

IMO

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Not sure how this part of the forum works, but nice to find that people are active on this part

Here its my remix i did for a great friend and a good musician, hope you like it (its in free download)

Progressive, wierd dance stuff, hope you like it



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Originally posted by djnitride Here is a track I have been working on some this weekend... Does it work from a conceptual level? I realize the percussion and mixing need work. I havn't gone into mixing deep yet and am just getting close to finishing the arrangement: EDIT: I think I am going to redo the synth progression in the first half after listening to it again.

the arp that comes in around 40 seconds is class, really dark or something, i would use it as the foundation, i dont really like where you take the track later on, i would make something really dark with that arp but thats probably not the direction you want to go

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